Ok..ok.. so i wrote another poem...
There you go! another one.
Don't think it's all that good, so umm.. feel free to critise.
I don't know what to name it, so i'm just sticking to this for the moment. until i can think of a better title. ^^
~Alone~ (or myb 'a quiet room'... you tell me)
A quiet room,
An empty room--
Solitude.
I crouch in a corner,
Wishing for a hug,
I waited forever--
No luck.
All alone,
The loneliness killing me,
Softly and gently,
It won't leave me be.
What have i done to deserve this?
Why am i alone?
When will the door open?
Letting in a friend, a soul.
A quiet room,
The room I'm in,
It's bright with white paint,
But inside--it's dim.
ok..ok.. so i lied. i wrote 2 poems today...
hold on a sec. i'll just copy it down.
don't understand why we can't copy paste our stuff into it... how troublesome.
~Silent cry~
A drop of water fell on her palm,
She gazed up upon the sky.
Nothing--
No rain, no storm,
It was her--she cried.
Slowly she collapsed on the ground,
But no one comes to help.
Slowly she reaches out her hand--
The one no one held.
She threw her fist down,
The floor hit her back.
But pain was nothing to her now,
Just a feeling, dad taught her that.
She struggled to reach,
The door everyone was in,
But no matter how hard she tried,
They merely watched--
The one they've never seen.
Her mouth opens,
With all her might she screamed,
But we couldn't hear her,
She was softer than a pin...
Done! now! COMMENT IT! or i shall never ever EVER post no poems on my blog again. ( most probably anyway.)
much obliged!
Don't think it's all that good, so umm.. feel free to critise.
I don't know what to name it, so i'm just sticking to this for the moment. until i can think of a better title. ^^
~Alone~ (or myb 'a quiet room'... you tell me)
A quiet room,
An empty room--
Solitude.
I crouch in a corner,
Wishing for a hug,
I waited forever--
No luck.
All alone,
The loneliness killing me,
Softly and gently,
It won't leave me be.
What have i done to deserve this?
Why am i alone?
When will the door open?
Letting in a friend, a soul.
A quiet room,
The room I'm in,
It's bright with white paint,
But inside--it's dim.
ok..ok.. so i lied. i wrote 2 poems today...
hold on a sec. i'll just copy it down.
don't understand why we can't copy paste our stuff into it... how troublesome.
~Silent cry~
A drop of water fell on her palm,
She gazed up upon the sky.
Nothing--
No rain, no storm,
It was her--she cried.
Slowly she collapsed on the ground,
But no one comes to help.
Slowly she reaches out her hand--
The one no one held.
She threw her fist down,
The floor hit her back.
But pain was nothing to her now,
Just a feeling, dad taught her that.
She struggled to reach,
The door everyone was in,
But no matter how hard she tried,
They merely watched--
The one they've never seen.
Her mouth opens,
With all her might she screamed,
But we couldn't hear her,
She was softer than a pin...
Done! now! COMMENT IT! or i shall never ever EVER post no poems on my blog again. ( most probably anyway.)
much obliged!
posted by cookie at 7:07 AM
7 Comments:
sans tanto grazioso e espressivo XD
good point rubber ducky!
I should! i should!
but... here comes the dilema.
how much?
haha...
i don't! do i?
oh well, it's easier writing sad poems compared to happy ones. haha.. as i've told florence b4.
i mean, think bout it! we study the DEAD crow, life's brief candle, the death in the opposite house... haha...
i can't picture you Alone, or being sad. You are to cheerful for sad poem (i mean u, not the poem)Anyway, nice sad poem!
i can't picture you Alone, or being sad. You are to cheerful for sad poem (i mean u, not the poem)Anyway, nice sad poem!
i can't picture you Alone, or in any other sad poem, coz you are too cheerful for that :) Anyway, nice sad poem!
oh. I commented thrice. sorry!
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